HELMER: No man sacrifices his honour for the one he loves.
NORA: A hundred thousand women have done so.
- A Doll House
NORA: A hundred thousand women have done so.
- A Doll House
All right, so I have about four pages of Chapter 11 of Secondhand Wings written. Which is not a lot at all. It's only about 1,600 words, and I plan on it being about 8 to 10 thousand. However, My semester finally ended and now I'll have some time to write over Christmas break.
It includes: Alicia/Oliver (well, hints at it, since she's only 11). I know that pairing isn't in the summary or anything, but it's a definite for the plot of this story. It won't last, obviously, since she does end up with George, but it's in the story either way. ALSO, I don't know if I've said this yet or not, but Secondhand Wings takes place in the Sober Universe, meaning that it only includes what is in the books. The things JRK has said (like George/Angelina) is NOT considered canon.
Also in this chapter is Mae realizing that things can never really go back to normal after her fight with Charlie, and there will be a lot of awkwardness as they try. There is a Care of Magical Creatures camping trip that should be quite revealing!
Nasty!Snape, Jealous!George (also Oblivious!George to his own feelings), immaturity, jokes, general Fred and George-ness.
As for Raindrops, I know that a lot of you are sort of confused as to what exactly is going on with that story. In the simplest of terms: I AM RE-WRITING IT. Like, completely, totally, and absolutely. I will continue to update with new chapters (very slowly, more than likely), but I am writing every day, it's just the beginning rather than the end. I won't post the new version until it catches up to wherever the old one is. When it does get released, I would definitely advise reading the new one, simply because it is SO much better than the old one. Like, a thousand times better. I know the characters, I know the plot, I know the major themes and ideas that I want to present. It just makes writing easier. The style is slightly different too, and I like this way a lot more.
Since the first version skipped over almost EVERYTHING in 5th year, I'm going back and actually writing the year.
Things to look forward to in the new Raindrops:
- Bellatrix as DADA professor
- Vanessa/Caradoc/Waverly triangle
- Auror!Greg Pearson (WHAT?)
- Cool!Peter
- A deeper continuing plot
- More Constance
- James not liking Lily (GASP) until some time into their 5th year
- Actual Jerk!James
- More Dorcas, Marlene, Edgar, Gideon, Fabian, Mary, Amos, Benjy, Reg, and Emmeline
- NEW characters include:
- Olivia Montague (a Hermione that never had a Harry and Ron to mellow her out)
- Amata Blane (that girl that no one wants to talk to because she is completely strange)
- Shay Fagan (has a relationship with a Marauder)
- Euan Ackerley (who eats parchment)
- Lois Li (love interest of another Marauder)
- Jacob Jones (older brother of Gwenog and a Quidditch fanatic)
- Spencer McKinnon (Marlene's older brother, possible relationship with a Gryffindor girl)
- Kingsley Shacklebolt (obviously not mine, but new to the story)
- Hamish Williamson (a rather useless Auror)
- Elvira (the Divination professor that actually predicts things with certain accuracy)
- Towler (the long-winded Magical Law professor with many odd habits)
So, I hope you're looking forward to that! As for Chapter 51, to be honest, I am TERRIFIED of writing it. All I've ever done is write about Lily and James being almost there or not there at all. I don't want the entire rest of the story to be anti-climactic because I can't do them justice. But I do have a ton of ideas for the chapter (including Neal Harris's reaction to the whole disregard-the-script-and-change-the-ending-of-the-story bit, back to school, new DADA teacher who is FAR more competent then the others before him, the war coming to Hogwarts--not physically, but mentally--the magical population's reaction to the new werewolf law, and of course--LILY/JAMES).
This is an excerpt from the new Raindrops, Chapter One: Potter and Evans (there is another excerpt back in a post from like, October if you want to read it as well).
“I bumped into Evans. Turns out she’s been made Prefect.”
“Bloody hell,” Sirius groaned, shaking his head. “We’ll have to watch ourselves this year with Prefect Prig on our case all the time.”
“She’s not that bad,” piped up Peter Pettigrew, speaking for the first time. “She helped me out in Charms last year, she’s the only reason I passed the practical exam.”
Peter Pettigrew was Hermes reincarnate. He had the slight figure and pointed features that the Greek god was alleged to have possessed, and was more of a trickster than even Peeves the Poltergeist. He had an all-encompassing sense of humor that drew others to him, and he tried to always speak the best of people unless they truly deserved otherwise.
“You would say that,” James commented, amused. Then, to Sirius, “How was your summer, mate? I didn’t hear much from you.”
His best friend scoffed and blew dark hair from his eyes. “My mum tried to redecorate my room, only to find that nothing would come off the walls. She locked me in there for a few weeks because she thought it’d be a good punishment.”
“Was it?” asked Peter, a blonde eyebrow arched above his small blue eyes.
Sirius smirked. “Punishment, are you kidding? I got be away from the lot of them for all that time,” He leaned back in his seat, a faraway smile on his face. “Couldn’t ask for a better summer at Grimmauld Place.”
Sirius Black. Gryffindor. Ladies’ man. Prankster Extraordinaire. That was all most people ever saw of him, and no one ever expected him to be anything more. However, the people closest to him knew better. They had seen the bruises and heard the Howlers that Sirius had received from his parents ever since he had been sorted into the House of the Brave years earlier. They knew that he dreaded the summer, but suffered in silence, because Sirius Black was not someone who wanted pity.
In a few words, he was boisterous, but brooding, ambitious, but unmotivated, dependable, but impulsive, diplomatic, but utterly tactless. Personality-wise, he was quite ambiguous. And the girls of Hogwarts saw him as a mystery that they thought they would be the one to solve.
None of them would.
By his family, Sirius was expected to marry a pureblooded girl with decent looks and notable ancestral background. By his friends, he was expected to fall for some half-decent slag somewhere down the road and lead a moderately happy life with her. By the female population of Hogwarts, well, each of them expected him to fall for her.
None of them were right.
“What about you, Pete?” Sirius asked, closing his eyes again. “Do anything exciting this summer?”
“Nothing in particular,” Peter answered leisurely. “My mum was with the neighbors most of the time. They’re Muggles, and they’ve got a son with one of those diseases that they don’t know how to cure, so she’s been bringing him soup and slipping Healing potions into it. So I was alone and I mostly read up on…” he glanced at the door to make sure no one was listening-in. “Animagi. There were some really interesting techniques we haven’t tried yet.”
Peter Pettigrew was brilliant at magic.
In theory.
He excelled in History and Astronomy and was decent in Herbology and Care of Magical Creatures, but when it came to actually performing spells, he seemed to have some sort of block. He did not know the reason, for none of his friends seemed to have any problems with magic on the whole, but they helped him out as best they could, so he never complained.
“Excellent,” said Sirius.
“The next full moon is on the twentieth,” James informed them. “If we work every night, maybe we can make it. I know I’m getting really close.”
Peter nodded in agreement. “And as soon as we do that, we can really get to working on the map.”
Sirius and James grinned at him, all three boys hoping for their most exciting year yet.
And, let the record show, it would be just that.
The Peter stuff is probably controversial to all of those who hate his guts, however, the way I see it, James, Remus, and Sirius all liked him a good deal. They were friends with him and they trusted him. There had to be something good there, it just eventually wore away.
Anyway, let me know what you think about all of this. Sorry for the uber-long post!
Love Always,
Kayla
I absolutely LOVE the new story, but I can't wait for it to be posted!!!!! Keep writing. Loved this post though. Very imformative.
ReplyDeleteI can't wait for more Raindrops and for the revamped version! I'm SO excited and I love your work!
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ahhahahaha. cool peter. classic. you jokester. nah, that's cool. from my opinion, and especially my story's opinion, James has like Lily since, well, since around third year. He just really started thinking about her that way before. there was always a bunch of awesome tension and whatever, but they only really started feeling that attraction when they were old enough. As I'm saying, you don't like someone your ENTIRE LIFE. at a young age you just see them as a companion, and soon they become someone you love. fact.
ReplyDeleteVanessa/Caradoc/Waverly triangle? I thought the waverly/caradoc was kept a secret. FOREVER. also, don't forget what I said and I THINK you should do. the whole Vanessa/Sirius at the beginning of becoming friends with the Marauders. and soon, it's full effing blown REMUS TIME! WOOT WOOT.
Yeah, the whole "I was under the imperius curse when i attacked Snape after OWLs" kinda pissed me off. a lot. I'd rather deal with Jerk James. all the way. that's how he was, you know? until either Remus, Lily, or a friend of Lily's just set him straight. told him what was really wrong.
ugh. I still don't think you should rewrite. . . please? I'm sorry, but rewriting is. . . well it's lame. I hate rewriters. I'm sorry, but the fact that you think you're story isn't good enough pisses me off. You've been given a gift of A WONDERFUL STORY, but you're starting over because you're not satisfied. really? REALLY? you don't see novelists rewriting, especially when it's already out there. and don't you dare tell me that the original was just "you writing, not really the real shitaki", because to hell if it wasn't.
LOOK. if you do rewrite, I'm expecting you to at least have the original raindrops, even if it is under a different name. if it is deleted, I'm going to kill something.
Also, if you rewrite, are you going to copy some parts of the old one, or are you really REWRITING to the max?
PM me later on FF.
I completely agree with you on the part about James not liking Lily his whole entire life pretty much. haha. That is just... unrealistic.
ReplyDeleteAnd the Vanessa/Caradoc/Waverly thing is... complicated, at least on Caradoc and Waverly's part. Vanessa will be out of it quickly (I'm imagining Sirius as a reboud, maybe). Whereas Doc and Wave... well... you'll see. XD
And I've decided that I quite like Jerk James, just because that's who he was. 100 percent until he finally, finally, changed for Lily.
As for re-writing. I am doing it whether you want me to or not. I just think I have so much more to offer than is in the original. Besides, it doesn't even begin to get good until chapter 15 or 16, and it doesn't have any real meaning or theme or value until 25 or 26. I want my story to mean something all the way through. It's not just some stupid, meaningless Romeo & Juliet story. It's Lily and James. And that means something.
But yes, there will definitely be parts of the old one in it. For sure. Especially a lot of the newer stuff. The thing that is mostly getting re-written is fifth year, because that only gets 12 incredibly short chapters in the original version. And I am definitely keeping the major events--the detention where they become friends, James bringing Sirius to Lily after he runs away, Lily's parents dying, Greg and Stella, Constance, Alice choosing Frank over her mum, all the fairytale stuff/Lily's conflicted thoughts that go with that, the play. All of that. It will be the same story, just infinitely better.
How did your NaNoWriMo turn out?? Did you like it?
ReplyDeleteEh, it was all right. I didn't finish, but it was fun! I'll definitely be doing it next year! Did you do it?
ReplyDeleteI didn't, I found out about it to late. I am so doing it next year! It sounds fun.
ReplyDeleteIt's awesommme. Just make sure that you don't plan anything major for the month of November! I had too much going on and no time to write.
ReplyDeleteOk. Thanks for the advice!
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